This story is about a person who have a skill that only makes him suffering. He can see the future and know what will happen, but, because of this, he have sadness moments and he decided that he will never have these thoughts again. The idea came to me after reading The Dead Zone, I didn't want do the same story, but I wanted to bring the same agony and sorrow that I felt for the caracter in the book. I hope I got the goal.
I would like to say thanks colleagues who helped me in the editing process, there were many betas in the way.
poster by Noglory
Информация
Аниме: Steins;gate series, Zankyou no terror, Kotonoha no niwa, Your name, Erased, One punch man
Музыка: Red Hot Chilli Peppers - Time, Rolling Stones - Time waits for no one
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You tried to make a story. You had an idea. You had technics. But you lacked these things:
1) Correct music choice. The music is not depressive enough to make the viewer feel the agony and sorrow. Instead it confuses the viewer.
2) Storytelling. Things that you have shown to create the story is not ok. A lot of confusing elements and characters.
I strongly appreciate your try. Keep improving, you have a great potential.
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THE END.
Идея понятна, но не получилось.
Автор хорошенько постарался.
В целом все остальное сделано несомненно хорошо, сюжет понятен, только концовка не совсем понравилась.
Трек у первого парта понравился, но в сцене первого видения он абсолютно не подходит. Может стоило в этом моменте другую музыку наложить, а после видения, продолжать основную.
Во втором парте с этим получше, но, как бы сказать...трек подходит для Steins, но не подходит для вашей истории что-ли. Я не чувствую "agony and sorrow" героя.